There Olivia sat looking at the body of water that never ends, how it flowed back and forth like a rocking chair. Then she heard something like a pair of foot steps that was coming closer to her. Olivia quickly turns her head to the direction of what is making the noise, the first thing she saw was the person's pearly, white teeth. Suddenly, Olivia's face lights up and rushes to hug her father, the man in the plain blue shirt and Capri's.
"Hi, daddy I am so glad you are back home. It has been long two weeks, especially with Aunt Sarah taking care of me. So, where is mom?" Olivia said.
"Hey! It's nice to see you too. Oh, um . . . mom is still at her mission," replied dad.
"Daddy,did you just say mom is on a mission?"questioned Olivia.
"No sorry I meant at a meeting, yeah she is at a meeting", stuttered her father, while he scratched the back of his head.
I really like how you used the appositive phrase and how you described her father. Is this supposed to be a flashback, because I thought that she does not know where her parents were. This is really good!
ReplyDeleteI love the amount of dialogue you used as well as varied sentence structure! You did a great job, I can't wait to read more!
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